It's a fascinating premise, but unfortunately it was all linear and rushed. I would advise you to hire some staff writers and to develop this concept further. Consider such techniques such as foreshadowing, pacing, and Easter Eggs. This gives readers the opportunity to unriddle your Mystery before the Grand Reveal at the End. Also: a visualization to illustrate your antagonist would be nice. But I enjoyed your use of tropes and stereotypes!! Keep it up!!
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Is there a Windows version? The Linux version doesn't work for me and the other one can't even be opened by my computer.
It's a fascinating premise, but unfortunately it was all linear and rushed. I would advise you to hire some staff writers and to develop this concept further. Consider such techniques such as foreshadowing, pacing, and Easter Eggs. This gives readers the opportunity to unriddle your Mystery before the Grand Reveal at the End. Also: a visualization to illustrate your antagonist would be nice. But I enjoyed your use of tropes and stereotypes!! Keep it up!!
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